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« on: March 07, 2010, 05:44:36 AM » |
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tell me what do you think of this: I don't know what your thinking....I don't know what you feel
even if you break my heart...I don't know if it'll heal
in situations like these you always know how to deal
but in desperations your life becomes like a seal
you draw a smile on my face just by hearing your steps in heels
will i hear it again or not that will depends on the ear
the thought of you not existing in this world is too much to bear
in the end you still got crushed by a fast driver's wheel
one speedy sport car with a high advanced gear
manged to ruin the life of a teenager's happy new year |
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« Last Edit: March 07, 2010, 06:43:24 AM by bone-crusher »
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« Reply #1 on: March 09, 2010, 07:12:35 PM » |
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Did you write it? That's very impressive, I see there's another poet in this household, well you know what, buster, there's only room enough for one of us! Kidding.
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« Reply #2 on: March 09, 2010, 09:04:44 PM » |
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Did you write it? That's very impressive, I see there's another poet in this household, well you know what, buster, there's only room enough for one of us! Kidding.
really...u like it...I thought no one reply because it sucked...I'm glad u liked it  |
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« Reply #3 on: March 09, 2010, 10:21:05 PM » |
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...I'm glad u liked it i'm glad that you're glad! are you glad that i'm glad that you're glad? |
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« Reply #4 on: March 10, 2010, 12:39:00 AM » |
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are you glad that i'm glad that you're glad?
if he's glad that you're glad that he's glad, then by all means, call me Sunshine 'cause I'm glad too |
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« Reply #5 on: March 10, 2010, 04:05:56 AM » |
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are you glad that i'm glad that you're glad?
if he's glad that you're glad that he's glad, then by all means, call me Sunshine 'cause I'm glad too lol...ok sunshine since we're all glad that we're glad then how about showing me my mistakes I mean every beginner have mistakes so whats mine ? |
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« Reply #6 on: March 10, 2010, 05:24:40 AM » |
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are you glad that i'm glad that you're glad?
if he's glad that you're glad that he's glad, then by all means, call me Sunshine 'cause I'm glad too lol...ok sunshine since we're all glad that we're glad then how about showing me my mistakes I mean every beginner have mistakes so whats mine ? too many. |
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« Reply #7 on: March 10, 2010, 06:36:20 AM » |
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are you glad that i'm glad that you're glad?
if he's glad that you're glad that he's glad, then by all means, call me Sunshine 'cause I'm glad too lol...ok sunshine since we're all glad that we're glad then how about showing me my mistakes I mean every beginner have mistakes so whats mine ? too many. I know thats why I told u to tell me since ur a poet |
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« Reply #8 on: March 10, 2010, 07:10:57 AM » |
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are you glad that i'm glad that you're glad?
if he's glad that you're glad that he's glad, then by all means, call me Sunshine 'cause I'm glad too lol...ok sunshine since we're all glad that we're glad then how about showing me my mistakes I mean every beginner have mistakes so whats mine ? too many. I know thats why I told u to tell me since ur a poet let me put it this way, if i was going to fix "Bombutachakua", my first Bombutachakua story back in 2004, I would have to re-write it. |
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« Reply #9 on: March 10, 2010, 02:02:53 PM » |
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 I get it now...thanx anyway |
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« Reply #10 on: March 10, 2010, 07:04:45 PM » |
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even though there are a few mistakes here and there, it's still good. You should be proud and continue, no body's perfect. In fact, most of my stories I wrote before 2008 (that's about 50) sucked and maintained no gramatical logic. Even though I can't fix them, I'm proud to have written them and will always keep them in my archive as the beganning of my writting life.
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« Reply #11 on: March 11, 2010, 04:19:45 AM » |
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even though there are a few mistakes here and there, it's still good. You should be proud and continue, no body's perfect. In fact, most of my stories I wrote before 2008 (that's about 50) sucked and maintained no gramatical logic. Even though I can't fix them, I'm proud to have written them and will always keep them in my archive as the beganning of my writting life.
no dont get me wrong I'm very proud of it but I wanted to see my mistakes so that I woudnt do them again...it's all good anyway...I'm so happy that someone actually liked this |
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